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Script Post: "Reality Takes a Holiday", Part II [Mar. 30th, 2016|07:21 pm]
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So when we last left Our Hero, Act One had just concluded...


The beginning of Act II is actually a lot different in this draft than what made it to the screen.

Marshall's V.O. at the beginning of this scene is different as aired: Instead of "Somehow I had to figure a way out of this, but it wasn't looking too good," it becomes, "Every kid dreams of being the star of their own TV show. Well, take it from me: it's a living hell." Also, he adds "Double-correction: Killed dead" at the end.

We then go to some major changes.

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We have a whole scene here with Marshall and Omri's agent Bert, rather than the one that appears in the ep where he's at hair and makeup with Julie and Mary-Margaret and getting some rough treatment at the hands of the hairdresser.

We do see the other two at the table briefly. In this draft, "Julie" is a completely different character who is frustrated that she had to put on a sweatshirt to cover her bare midriff instead of telling Mary Margaret that they "have to stand up for women everywhere and demand roles with meatier scripts and better characters for women" and threatening to vomit on the producer "If I have to say one more air-headed big sister line..."

The script is missing the whole "Mom, does Dad know about that tattoo?" exchange, the part where Mary-Margaret admits she cried for days after Jake and the Fatman, and Marshall running off to the hairdresser remarking, "Where's any red-blooded teen star go when they get cancelled? On a crime spree."

Instead, we see Marshall is not overjoyed to learn that his big death scene is generating Emmy buzz for his alter ego.

The scene between Marshall and Bert continues:
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In the episode, Marshall still gets the line about not standing still and letting "that weasel Dash" shoot him, but it's Mary-Margaret that gets "Careful, he might hear you" instead of Bert. It makes me wonder exactly how concerned are they supposed to be here? Just trying to avoid a teen actor feud, or is there some perception that Dash is the one in charge?

So we end this page on girls rushing in...

...and on the next page:
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Mars is still as nervous around girls as he was when he was Harvest King. But it's okay, because they're interested in Dash anyway. (As are Mary-Margaret and Julie, apparently.)

Bert's frozen smile makes me think Dash worries him.

As Marshall runs away, there's also a cut scene with WARREN LITTLEFIELD (President of NBC at the time) who is interested in meeting Dash. It's not specified whether he would have been playing himself.

[Note: Return to Hooterville was, as far as I know, not a real thing in 1992. It exists now.]

The scene where Marshall runs away past Edgar finally getting his massage is pretty much as scripted.

Some differences:
Justin is on his phone saying, "Darn it, Mom, I told you to sell when it hit fifteen!" In the episode, that conversation doesn't happen until Mars & Dash's fight scene. Instead, Justin's reading the Variety with the "Network Nukes Omri" headline here.

As scripted, Francis says, "It was such a phony scene. And did you see the Miss Thing Jeremy was with?" In the episode, the second part is replaced by "I mean, I felt embarrassed for Dustin, the way people fawn on him..." Also, "Sic transit gloria Omri" is not in the script.

In the episode, Justin doesn't get to say, "He's sure acting weird" in reference to Omri/Mars.

There's a significant, important rewrite in the bit with Jose, Dash and Justin:
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Jose is scripted as the one in charge in this draft, telling Justin and Dash to go find Omri, and the stakes aren't that high for anybody but Mars, as far as we know. They just want to get back to filming already.

In the final episode, there's the added Jose line which raises said stakes: "Our little teenage has-been needs a reality check. If he’s not back before the final shot, the network is going to cancel all of us!"

And that's where Dash looks concerned, and orders Jose to just worry about the script, "Justin and I will find him. He's not getting off this lot."

[Which--spoiler alert--they fail at, and hence we don't get season 2. Thanks, Dash. But that's okay; it's no secret I don't think Marshall-less Eerie would have worked anyway.]

They also don't try to take the DeLorean in the final episode like they do here, though Justin does try to touch it, and gets a "Don't touch the car!"

Marshall's V.O. is different in the episode than here. Instead of "I figured my house would be hollow inside--it was" but rationalizing that he has to hide somewhere, Marshall seems to be both a bit more desperate and a bit more trusting in the reality of his house: "Eerie, Indiana: The Last Testament of Marshall Teller. I'd come to the end of the line. Hunted, lost, nowhere to hide. And then I saw...home. The safest place there is. But like everything else, it turned out to be fake!"

This makes some sense given the changes to the World O' Stuff scene.

In the episode, Dash is the one with the megaphone calling Omri.

Detail I just now noticed (probably as a result of watching a bunch of Gravity Falls in the meantime): the gold pyramid on the dash of the golf cart.

There's a cut scene that starts at the end of this page that makes the whole lack of season 2 really hurt for me. Dash (after a line that make me wince by ending in "not") does the "What's that on your shirt?" thing to Justin and they have a slap-fight laughing and bonding moment. This parallel reality that Marshall is beginning to suspect is controlled by Dash includes this specific detail.

Which, Marshall, even knowing full well that this is not the real Simon, gets really upset about:
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Yep, threatening to shoot him is one thing, but hanging out with his best buddy...this is going too far.

I need the reality where season 2 happened so much now. I want to see Dash and the real!Simon bonding (which, let's face it, they already sort of have) and Mars not being able to stand it. Especially not after having survived NBC.

Or does Marshall tell Simon, which makes Simon stop trusting Dash and wanting to be his friend? Which means the friendship remains one more thing that Marshall has and Dash doesn't?

Either way, I will regret forever not knowing how this whole dynamic would have played out on TV.

Anyway, on the rest of the page, we have the fight scene. Some slight differences in the action and dialogue here. And in the final episode, we have Justin's angry phone conversation with his Mom.

Also Dash's, "All right, time to go back to the stage, 'Marshall'" when he has Mars pinned down. As aired, it's the first time he uses Marshall's name.

And more fight scene:
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Again, some differences from the episode. Significantly, as aired, it's "Eerie's not big enough for the both of us" not "[t]he show."

Dash straight up smacks Marshall!

Also, "We go to Plan B"?! What was Dash's Plan B?

The Fruit of the Loom guys having lunch in the background are not in the script.

Some minor changes:
In the episode, when Jose comes rushing out of the office worried about the DeLorean, he says, "Can't you see? This is an emergency!" to his secretary, Kathy. In the script, it's "Priorities, babe. We gotta check the car."

Which is likely why as scripted, Kathy's first line on getting back to her office is "What a creep."

[Of course, I'm trying to picture all these scenes as played by Archie Hahn now.]

There's also a different pyramid thing in Kathy's office.

In the script, Kathy says, "Nothing like doing things at the last minute. I'll try" instead of "Why didn't he tell me?" when Marshall hands her his new page.

Bigfoot in the chair when Marshall gets back to the set is not in the script.

Marshall has a cut voiceover as he walks back on set after: "I'd done all that I could. Eerie had taken its best shot at me. There was no point in running away...I had to face it." [Interesting that he mentions Eerie as his antagonist here and not Dash specifically.]

Cut from the final episode: Marshall's resigned "Lead on" as the A.D. leads him on set.

This exchange with the director:
Marshall: "Sorry, but if you were living a nightmare, you'd be late, too."
Dante: "Good: use that anger, that desperation. And since we're getting a late start, we're going to pre-rig you for the shooting." [Odd, since at this point, we've just established that he's not as desperate or angry anymore.]

The following lines are not in the script:
Marshall: "Well, I guess I haven’t been myself."
Dante: "You’re telling me. Lyle, he's all yours...full loads, plenty of splatter."
[after Lyle's line]
Dante: "Pull up your shirt. Come on, help the man out, will you?"

In the script, it's "What's he using, a machine gun?" instead of "What's he using, an uzi?"

Not in the script:
Dash's "Lyle, Lyle...those won’t be necessary. We’re doing this take au naturale" and the laughter that follows.

In the script, Kathy’s not reading Mysteries of the Bermuda Triangle as the pages slowly print.

The other actors' action and chatter around the table (Mary-Margaret's "My bangs are way too short and I need a face lift..." and so on) before they shoot is unscripted.

Francis' line slightly changed. In the script, it's "The show must go on...even if it goes on without us." As aired, it becomes "...without some of us" which somehow seems colder.

Marshall has a V.O. before asking about his motivation: "My time was running out fast. If those script changes I made didn't get here soon, well...I didn't know what would happen, but I knew it wouldn't be good."

In the script, there are a couple of extra lines with Dash right before Dante says "Action!"
Dash: "But you can't do that!"
Director: "This is television, kid. The director's just a hired hand. If the pages say change it, I change it. I've got a family to support."
Dash: "Then change it back!"

This is all cut, and instead Dash just runs up behind him yelling, "No, no, no! Don’t say..." unobserved, so we don't know if he could have done anything about Marshall's script changes by talking to the director. He just ran out of time.

In the script, Syndi has the line, "Is he Mr. Weirdo, or what?" as Marshall's wandering around making sure Eerie is really there.

Another cut V.O. as Mars finds the single script page: "All the trouble started when I found that script in the mailbox. If I never set eyes on the script, it couldn't affect me."

This time the page shown onscreen is different from the actual script. Marshall's "You know, on second thought, I think I would like to go to the movie with you guys" is at the bottom of page 1 after Simon saying "Which fingers?" and Syndi showing Marshall the paper. [Which doesn't make any sense, but who's paying attention that closely?]

And we end with some final changes:
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Marshall's final voiceover as aired is completely different: "My name is Marshall Teller and I've learned an important lesson about reality. In this life, you can either follow the script they give you or demand a rewrite. But in Eerie, Indiana: Weirdness Central, USA, you’ve got to be ready to improvise."

And Dash does not get one final "BANG!" with an imaginary gun.

It's a slightly more sinister ending.

Alas, we never learned what happened next.
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[User Picture]From: eviinsanemonkey
2016-03-31 01:46 am (UTC)
aaaaaaaaaah i wish there'd been a season 2

thank you for doing these :)
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-03-31 08:24 pm (UTC)
"Somehow I had to figure a way out of this, but it wasn't looking too good," it becomes, "Every kid dreams of being the star of their own TV show. Well, take it from me: it's a living hell." Also, he adds "Double-correction: Killed dead" at the end

I have to say, I prefer the line that aired here - Mars's tendancy to over-react and exaggerate everything is a bi part of what gives Eerie it's charm.

The Julie we got is also way better - UGH why a love scene with her and nine-year-old Justin, who even thought that?

I do think I prefer the script ending though - I like the line about making your own reality, and the hint that Dash hasn't given up and will still be coming after Mars.

I never picked up in the episode that the assistants name is Kathy - did that actually air?

[Interesting that he mentions Eerie as his antagonist here and not Dash specifically.]

YES, I love this, the idea that Eerie is on some level aware... and malignant.

I would have loved to see Bert onscreen (love how the script has him "oozing" over to Dash) and the whole Fred Suggs as Jose would have been AMAZING.
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-01 01:01 pm (UTC)
I have to say, I prefer the line that aired here - Mars's tendancy to over-react and exaggerate everything is a bi part of what gives Eerie it's charm.

Yes, as re-written it's far more of an in-character Marshall line!

The Julie we got is also way better - UGH why a love scene with her and nine-year-old Justin, who even thought that?

I am so glad that this never made it on air, and wondering how it ever made it as far as this draft of the script. Because ick.

Aside from the dating Justin thing, poor Julie has almost no character in this draft, so kudos to whoever gave her one.

I do think I prefer the script ending though - I like the line about making your own reality, and the hint that Dash hasn't given up and will still be coming after Mars.

There was just...so much possibility there. I also want to believe we would have gone back and gotten the in-universe explanation for what sent Dash over the edge between episodes to go from being their not-quite-trustworthy semi-friend to being willing to kill Mars.

I never picked up in the episode that the assistants name is Kathy - did that actually air?

Nope, she never actually has a name in the episode as aired.

[Interesting that he mentions Eerie as his antagonist here and not Dash specifically.]

YES, I love this, the idea that Eerie is on some level aware... and malignant.


Yeah, there are hints of that in earlier episodes, but now we have straight confirmation that it's Eerie itself that's the Big Bad, at least in Marshall's eyes.

I do like the fan theory I read somewhere a while back that Dash was actually created to be the personification of Eerie, and this would definitely lend weight to that.

Even if not, I can definitely see a shift to a mytharc from here as Marshall moves from dealing with the weirdness of the week to taking on the force behind it all.

I would have loved to see Bert onscreen (love how the script has him "oozing" over to Dash) and the whole Fred Suggs as Jose would have been AMAZING.

I am so sad for what might have been!
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-02 09:47 am (UTC)
I also want to believe we would have gone back and gotten the in-universe explanation for what sent Dash over the edge between episodes to go from being their not-quite-trustworthy semi-friend to being willing to kill Mars.

Ugh, THIS. There is such backstory potential there and we never got to see any of it come to fruition!

Yeah, there are hints of that in earlier episodes, but now we have straight confirmation that it's Eerie itself that's the Big Bad, at least in Marshall's eyes.

Yeah, like in the Hole in the Head Gang, Dash warns Simon that "this is every man for himself... amd Eerie against all men." I love that line, it's sooo ominous, and of course it's something else we never see expanded on.


I do like the fan theory I read somewhere a while back that Dash was actually created to be the personification of Eerie,


I don't think I've read that one - if you find the link, could you post it up please?

And YES to the start of a myth arc, God yes!
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-02 05:58 pm (UTC)
I don't think I've read that one - if you find the link, could you post it up please?

I'll have to see if I can find where I read that. (And hope it wasn't an in-person conversation, in which case the details are forever lost.)

It's something I've wished I could read/write, because on the one hand, it's not like Dash likes or trusts Eerie any more than Marshall does. And on the other hand...oh, that would make it so much worse. And that would be an interesting story. Poor kid.

I want to believe that in the universe where we'd gotten more seasons, there would have been a mytharc. And it would have made more sense in its own weird way than the one on The X-Files.
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-03 12:10 pm (UTC)
It's something I've wished I could read/write, because on the one hand, it's not like Dash likes or trusts Eerie any more than Marshall does. And on the other hand...oh, that would make it so much worse. And that would be an interesting story. Poor kid.

Oh God me too, it would have been so heart-hurtingly incredible!

And I love the idea that Eerie would have developed it's own mythology if it had been given time. Possibly there's world where it ran for like ten years and got really convoluted and confusing ala the X-Files and Lost, and maybe our reality is better than that one, though...
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-03-31 09:33 pm (UTC)
And OF COURSE Bill Cipher is involved, reality warping is literally his thing.
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[User Picture]From: eviinsanemonkey
2016-03-31 09:36 pm (UTC)
i'm 100% convinced dipper and mabel are syndy's kids.

:x
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-01 06:53 am (UTC)
CROSSOVER TIME!!
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-01 12:11 pm (UTC)
I want the one where Uncle Marshall meets Great Uncle Ford for the first time!
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[User Picture]From: eviinsanemonkey
2016-04-01 07:27 pm (UTC)
well that's a thing that needs to happen...
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-02 09:49 am (UTC)
THISTHISTHISITYTHIS
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-01 01:04 pm (UTC)
I would love to see that crossover!

Especially since Marshall has a lot of the exact same curiosity weaknesses we've seen Bill exploiting before...
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-02 09:50 am (UTC)
Also, I realised in the shower this morning that DippyFresh is just Nick and Eddie in cartoon form.
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-02 05:45 pm (UTC)
OMG, you are not wrong!
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-03 12:11 pm (UTC)
Maybe Nick and Eddy are Marshall's dream-bubble version of friends his own age, making Mars the Mabel of Eerie, not the Dipper...
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-03 03:12 pm (UTC)
OMG, I like this! The entire Eerie we've seen is actually just Marshall's dream bubble, which would explain so much about things like how time works.

Meanwhile, Bill is outside wreaking havoc...
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-03 09:20 pm (UTC)
See? This is why it sometimes seems like Mars and Simon have been thirteen and nine respectively for the best part of two years. And Dash isnt so much Marshall's evil twin as like, the manifestation of the part of Mars' brain that knows somethings wrong...
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-03 09:31 pm (UTC)
YES!
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-02 10:10 am (UTC)
Maybe the Omri from the NBC-verse was rasing hell and going on crime sprees because Bill jacked his body. Only Mars made it back to Eerie without unravelling the central mystery so he never got rescued,and that's why Eerie was cancelled...

Fuck Bill Cipher, basically.
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[User Picture]From: merrymelody
2016-04-03 08:13 pm (UTC)
Dante: Lyle, he's all yours...full loads, plenty of splatter."
Dante: "Pull up your shirt. Come on, help the man out, will you?"
Dash's "Lyle, Lyle...those won’t be necessary. We’re doing this take au naturale".


Okay, AU where the set Omri/Mars wakes up on is a porno.
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[User Picture]From: froodle
2016-04-03 09:09 pm (UTC)
Okay, legitimately in real life laughed and applauded when I read this!
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[User Picture]From: deifire
2016-04-03 09:30 pm (UTC)
*dies*
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